Oh thy beauty-
Unfathomable, obtrusive,
Thy beauty, a gifted gift, a treasured treasure,
Thou bow before and meditate over the shallow river,
Thou see through it all,
thy love, thy soul,
Finding, looking at thy moon-face,
Smile ever present on thy lips, thou looking for thyself everywhere,
The nymphs envy thee,
Aphrodite spites thee,
Persephone wants thee
……
Oh thy vanity-
Unfathomable, obtrusive,
Thy vanity, a banning bane, a grieving grievance,
Thou bow before and mull over the shallow river
Thou know it all,
thy pride, thy conceit,
Ever-present on thy wretched face,
Sneer ever present on thy lips, thou look for thy shadow everywhere,
The nymphs snigger at thee,
Aphrodite spites thee,
Persephone snubs thee
……
Thy beauty, thy vanity-
Circe wanted thy love,
Loved thee with ferocity,
The magician-witch wanted thee,
Wanted thee but thou sneered, chortled at her,
And in her vengeance, she cursed thee,
Cursed thee for herself, cursed thee for thyself,
Banished to Hades, thy life lost,
Cursed thee for herself, cursed thee for thyself,
Meditate over the dead river… River Styx,
In those frothy rotten waters, thou mull over
……
Thy beauty, thy vanity, thy curse-
Narcissus:
* For dVerse. Again, I haven’t used the prompt directly; rather I have used the main theme- water, river, etc., as a component of my creation. It is nevertheless a necessary element in the story of Narcissus.
* There are many mythological tales related to Narcissus; in some he was loved by Echo, in some, Nemesis punished her, and as such. I have narrated a tale; the references to which I read in a poem on Persephone I read just yesterday. I have added a little bit of my own imagination here.
smiles…i imagine a bit of imagination snuck into the old tales through the years, so you are fine…ah, to think too highly of oneself and only love one self….it makes for a sad life…if nothing else hopefully the old tale reminds us of that…nice retelling in your own words…even a bit more classical wording as well….does well with it…
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thank you Brian. self-love is dangerous if it leads to vanity and pride..
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Hard to be Narcissus – he seems to feel deeply even in the shallows. Thanks for participating. k.
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thanks..
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I like the repetitive phrases, classic old words and use of myths as your frame or story ~
If you are more ambitious, you can set this to a classic sonnet form ~
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oh yes.. thanks for the suggestion.
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What a beautifully written poem….in the classic style. Beauty and vanity CAN sometime be a curse indeed.
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beauty is a curse if it turns to vanity.. thank you very much.
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Wonderful – a beautiful rendering of a classic, endlessly intriguing myth! 🙂 🙂
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thanks a lot, Helen.. 🙂
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This is such a meaningful write about an important myth. And I think it fits the prompt perfectly.
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Thank you.
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narcissus! excellent take on the water prompt. deeply meaningful and far reaching. great write.
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thank you.
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nice..love your narcissus take…and oh… the dangers of beauty and admiring oneself too much… very cool take
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thank you. who says beauty can’t be lethal.. 🙂 it is the most treasured commodity, also being the most harmful one..
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Loved the classical feel…it flowed beautifully, must take care not fall into the seas of vanity though…nice take on the prompt. 🙂
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true.. thanks. 🙂
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OMG this is absolutely FANTASTIC! i am totally in love with this… wow. amazing subject you chose – and it totally fits the dVerse prompt… brilliant. i am at a lack of words… rambling here – totally awestruck.
wow.
just wow.
thank you for this treat – you made my day.
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oh.. thank you so much.. you made my day actually..
thanks a lot for this wonderful feedback.. 🙂
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HA the pictures you placed to accompany this amazing piece are equally as outstanding as your words. This (for now) is my favourite of yours.
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