coming of autumn
a cool breeze brings smile to face
morning thoughts wander
~
departing summers
brightness dimming in the air
taking a last whiff
.
* For Carpe Diem # 286.
coming of autumn
a cool breeze brings smile to face
morning thoughts wander
~
departing summers
brightness dimming in the air
taking a last whiff
.
* For Carpe Diem # 286.
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These are closer to my understanding of haiku than most others I have seen on WP. Nice writing.>KB
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Because haiku are meant to have a season word in them and they have to capture a particular moment.
Kristjaan at Carpe Diem is prompting us with Japanese season words this month. The result is definitely going to be a haiku written in traditional sense.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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I actually love the smell of autumn in the air…guess the leaves changing and shift in air temperature create it. I don’t associate a scent of summer but your haiku does. Well done!
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Thank you Maggie.
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I love your use of the scent of summer and saying good-bye! 🙂
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Your words evoke nice memories of the season before I came to Florida. So close to the subtle change of the season. We can almost feel it here.
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Yes, there is just a slight change right now. We can feel it in the air.
Thanks for the comment.
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well done!
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After the heat of summer the feeling of a sweet cool breeze and the scent of autumn going along with it makes that the senses awaken again … and finally autumn is there.
Wandering through my neighborhood, sniffing up the scent of decaying leaves I realize that autumn is there … my favorite season. Thank you HA for sharing this set of haiku. They are well written and so in tune with the coming of autumn.
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When the cool weather finally comes, it’s not just my morning thoughts that wander!
Shoving Autumn Back
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I always think: fantastic fall and wearisome winter….A winsome duo, nicely done…
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love that last whiff.. and I love the season words
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departing summer and taking that last whiff – I like that. Lovely evocation of the change of seasons.
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catching the cool breeze and saying good-bye to summer – something that must be done. lovely haiku set.
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