A Nimble Adventure (Musing and Editing)

A Nimble Adventure

(original, written on 3 June’ 13)

craving for a nimble adventure,

he boards a train,

prairie bound,

and decides to vault off

this rapidly moving leviathan,

each limb swirling in the wind,

singing deep-throated in rapture,

and eventually

finding his hall to the crypt,

he shivers and trembles,

opening his eyes,

from the nightmare.

Yearning for nimble adventure…

(trying to write a Villanelle out of it)

yearning for nimble adventure,

he hops on last journeying train,

final one to join the venture,

.

prairie bound fleet, he conjectures,

a lowering descent to the plains,

he yearns for nimble adventure,

.

dark tombs remind him of failure,

his life in his eyes was all vain,

but he did join this last venture,

.

hazy thoughts of a dark future,

he decides to vault off his pain,

he yearns for nimble adventure,

.

his every limb, the wind captures,

shivering, he has find his cure,

he joined this very last venture,

.

he sings deep-throated in rapture,

finds his way to hall crypt allure,

he ends the nimble adventure,

he had joined this final venture.

A Nimble Expedition

(finally editing the original in free verse)

yearning for a nimble expedition,

he boards a charcoal train,

prairie bound,

traversing through the dark tombs,

heightened blocks of sand and shingles,

he squints his eyes to ward off

the phantoms of the past,

he decides to vault off

this progressing leviathan,

adjoined with nuts and bolts

destined to go loose one day

like that of the spectacle of a ship,

he takes a leap to freedom,

each limb whirling in the wind,

singing deep-throated in rapture,

and eventually

finding his hall to the crypt,

he shudders, trembles,

opening his eyes,

from the reverie

* At dVerse today, we are paying attention to the pieces we once created but now, we have forgotten about. It is time to enter their worlds again and try to make certain changes. I took a poem I wrote in June, and first tried to write a villanelle out of it. I wrote it but it could not keep up with the pace of the poem. So, I decided to make changes in the original free verse. I would like to work on this poem more in the future though because I am not satisfied. I still like the original the best. Now, you are the judge. Do share your views.