I embrace invisibility of air,
and cling to it, but falling down,
unsupported by vapours and gas,
smacking my chin, squashing in and
teeth of the lower jaw, rising high
and high, ploughing into the tongue,
to let the blood rivulets surge out,
to taint red the invisibility of air,
and flush it with sinful crimson
of my hurt, rendering it visible
to my eye, because a victim I’m
of nature’s treachery, of ennui
of the evanescent air, I now
wipe away the rest of it from
my kaput lips, my persistent
psyche has me close my eyes,
to see none of matter of mine,
embracing the air in gratuity,
clung to our likeness, after
donning in me that invisibility
.
For dVerse Poetics. It will take me a while to visit you but I would find my way to your writing space and dwell in your words for sometime.
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the invisibility of air… i wonder how it would be if air and all the winds would be visible… it’s still magic to me how the air can carry us…and sometimes we fall and it’s cool when we still manage to trust again
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what an interesting pairing of music with this amnol…especially in contrast to the biting of the tongue in falling down…yikes…makes my tongue hurt just thinking about it…we can not see air but it is there…without it we would be short…ha…i am def grateful for it…just because i cant see it does not mean it is not there…
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I like the idea of embracing the invisibility of air. It is all around us, so very important to us, but cannot be seen. So much that is invisible affects a person greatly.
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How can we ever ever find that support… I find like grasping for the invisible we fall… and what a pain it is…. not much support were it would be mostly needed.
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The need for stronger and more tangible reality comes across very strongly in your poem, HA!
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I specially like this part: taint red the invisibility of air ~
Good one HA & good luck on your exams ~
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Beautiful, HA, and I love that you are spreading media!
My favourite part would definitely be this:”because a victim I’m
of nature’s treachery, of ennui
of the evanescent air,”
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Cleverly done HA and well done on the YouTube – I wouldn’t know where to begin – so much admiration.
Oh if only we could embrace the wonder that is air.
Anna :o]
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I resonate with the idea of trying to render the pain visible……which we all try in so many different ways to do………a thought-provoking poem, kiddo!
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Pain is such a monumental thing, yet so hard to describe, so difficult to make three dimensional. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Innovative way of presenting it, HA! Very apt with Richard’s style. Perfect word crafting to balance it too! Great!
Hank
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Well done, this has many dimensions and layers to bring me back again and again for more reads!
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The words could stand alone; the video makes them magical.
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Yikes! We want the universe to be one way–centering around us and supporting us–and it does in some ways, and then not! Very surprising and intriguing. Thanks. k.
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The piano music and palm branches bring a hopefulness of healing from the pain…and i especially like your phrase “ennui of the evanescent air”!
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sometimes I wonder, if the wind could brace my fall…odd I realize, but it feels so tangible even if invisible. lucky for my lips I have never tested my ponderance. definitely an interesting write.
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air is invisible yet we need it to sustain life..interesting poem..
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air… the one thing none of us can see, is our biggest need… kinda makes you rethink the idea of invisible… nice
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Embracing air, even to see it, how amazing that would be, there is much sadness in this however. Good luck with your you tube. 🙂
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Ah! yes there are so many ways to embrace the invisibility of air – However, I think the video could have been better if you added the poem to an actual video than the static picture, it would have added an effect. Like the music – calm and soothing.
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wow, I wish i had that kind of talent. That was amazing! you are really gifted!
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Wow, so beautiful! Thank you for sharing this with us. It is so painful but I hope there will still be hope.
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