they streamed out,
in quick succession—
holding handkerchiefs
to their noses, some
emerged with their eyes
watering, others were
coughing,
siren blaring the coda
to what unfolded
inside, burning eyes,
.
the five-minute riot
bifurcates
sense of accomplishment,
to the bingeing
on bad behaviour,
unprecedented,
a gross miscalculation,
the plan nixed, to allow
today’s debacle,
lost…
.
A 55-word erasure poem for Imaginary Garden With Real Toads. Worded after massive erasing of text but in serial order of course, from here.
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Very effective erasure poem–and you captured it all in 55 words! Glad that you kept “bingeing on bad behavior”. My favorite phrase from the text and one that could easily be applied to politicians in my country as well.
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Interesting considering this was a room full of adults!
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This conveys a strong social statement. Many catch phrases that could apply to multiple scenarios.
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55 sad words… Will it ever change?
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🙂 Hi Ha, it’s been a while ~~ I read the article, there clearly was bad behavior. If this kills the creation of the new state, well, in the states we have a saying, “there is more than one way to skin a cat.”
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would be a scary moment to be trapped inside when bad behavior goes wrong
cool use of bifurcates….
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