I pour my lifeblood in a chalice
to satiate your thirst for my pain,
and rid me off my malignant malice,
sipping through this aged champagne,
.
renewal it is, a life anew would rise,
as we take these steps apart away,
but leaving a scar within my disguise,
from where I bleed for you, my Frey,
.
I walk on to reach the volatile valley,
where I can shed myself to tethers,
here waits for me my last galley,
blazed in a fury, thawing my feathers,
.
this is the end, the end of things,
the final words of my dirge rings
.
A 100 word poem for Friday Fictioneers.
lovely and darkly intense.
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… satiate your thirst for my pain… now that is reproachful. Very good poem about heartbreak
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heartbreaks are sinew deep, scars unseen. Lovely intense exploration of the pain of endings and letting go.
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Sometimes ‘loved ones’ just want to hurt you
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Brilliant sonnet, darling — dark and lovely.
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wonderfully dark and sad… heartbreakingly sad.
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Intriguing write.
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This shows a lot of suffering. The reader is drawn into it. Good one.
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anmol you are quite the advanced and exceptional writer…loving what you do, though sad and painful…brilliantly written.
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Dear Anmol,
Intense and emotional. Well done verse.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Love the first two lines the most-very evocative and full of a deep ache and longing-loved it Anmol 🙂
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Heartbreaking and intense. Beautiful, really 🙂
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A great little sonnet and very moving. Wish I had written this.
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Nice start on a poem here. The rhyme scheme is subtle and pleasant, set against the backdrop of the unsettling topic. The meter reads a bit rough for my taste. Although I don’t generally find formal poetry appealing, I think you have the content here to make a neat and altogether creepy sonnet. JMHO.
Cheers!
MG
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def dark…the offering of the chalice of the life blood to satiate you need for pain…to feel anything really….nice intensity to this fast moving piece….
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Excellent poetry – Dark and sad. I like your writing – thanks! Nan
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