there was nothing, to stop the tempest, which has arrived,
a breath of veracity, kissing my throat, gripping my soul,
flaking the past, the withered leaves of memories blown away,
horses begin to neigh, and chortle at stances brought up,
drawing circles of circles, till when the heart tears up,
for the beans of opportunities are spilled, I once had,
clogged blood now run through veins, clotted on pale skin,
it matters not what is lurking, behind my severed shadow,
remaining are the ashes, aftermath of an eruption called life,
wielding the spirits of struggles, at every bend in journey,
I am left smothered with a slithering skin of tomorrow,
a fantasy worded, but never coming alive, just passing by
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This piece is written, inspired from Dada and Random poetry. I had written twelve separate ten-word verses/lines and through a random series generator, positioned them accordingly. It is an interesting way to write. If you are interested and write something this way, do link it back to me. I’d be glad to read it. And if you have any questions, do ask me.
A little confession, I cheated a bit… changing a few words(only a few) to make some sense out of it all and of course, the punctuation is to be managed. š
I am tagging it as the post for 6 November for NaBloPoMo. And I am also linking it up with dVerse OLN.
Also, please leave a link to one of your posts in your comments. It makes it easier for me to visit you all. š
Interesting write HA. >KB
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what a wonderful way to write, piecing different lines together, it does not matter if you cheated a little š I thought it flowed really well.
http://ramblingsfromamum.wordpress.com/2013/11/05/another-day-prose/
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Very interesting writing style, HA. The last line wraps up the poem perfectly.
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If you hadn’t written about the randomness of the creation I could never have guessed. Love the read…
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quite moving for the style…the eruption of life is a powerful part…the feel of the future slipping by you…oy, not so good a feeling you end on….
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I am left smothered with a slithering skin of tomorrow…cool…the fantasy just passing by and never coming alive made me sad…ugh…
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Yes, the Dada aspect is evident, and the poem works well; even better if every random line is written my you on other scraps & notebooks, and pieced together for this effect; enjoyed it, sir.
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It’s been a while since I seen a work of this caliber. Very excellent piece here!
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I enjoyed reading how these lines came into being HA! The result is quite fascinating.
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A cool piece!
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Great opening lines. I can almost feel that brash wind against my face.
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That’s an interesting way to write a poem, Anmol. I’m too much of a control-freak to play with my words like this, despite what my blog’s tagline says … smiles.
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Curious to be sure, and brave too!
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I’ve heard of writing a poem this way, but I’ve never had the courage to try it. Amazing how cohesive it turned out to be!
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Isn’t ‘tempest’ a beautiful word? I love the way it sounds and looks. Then, you had me at “kissing my throat”. The painting you included with the poem is strange and lovely. I admittedly admired the artwork for a long time before ever reading the poem. Is it Maxfield Parish? At any rate, the entire entry is luscious, thank you for sharing. Please feel free to stop by sometime at http://lovelytl33.blogspot.com/
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I am sorry, for not being able to leave a comment on your blog. I am sorry that the holiday didn’t go so good for you. I hope you feel better now. And I certainly enjoyed your writing style.
Take care! š
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This is so interesting – I loved what you wrote. I don’t think I could ever write anything like this haha – poetry, as a whole, is a mystery to me.
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Interesting way to form a poems…some fabulous lines. Very much enjoyed!
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Hi there, I thought this was a really strong piece from you. Really interesting, and made me want to read more! Best wishes
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Loved this. So Creative and unique…marvelously expressed!
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Very cool.
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An interesting way to create a poem capturing some magic…the picture is so fitting
for the theme of the poem and yes, there is a theme…very effective use of imagery
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Dada poems baffles me ~ But you have created something beautiful out of it ~
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Nice!! Well done! Interesting way to create a poem, I like it! š
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That’s awesome! What generator did you use? š
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This is the link. š
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š Thank you!!
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Until I read your description of the genesis of the poem, I had no idea: it seemed to flow quite well. Whatever you’ve done, however you’ve cheated, it clearly worked!
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