your irises are the colour of coal,
dark, brooding, igniting my heart,
with a desire, to writhe in the flames
of your wild sight, of your blazing glare,
.
your voice is the color of crimson roses,
succulent, musical, arousing my skin,
getting a feel of your every word,
mesmerized, by the tremor of your lips,
.
your sanctimonies are the color of muck,
impenetrable, rotten, stabbing my mind,
with the reverberating libels, of your deeds,
and the mouldering state, of your marshy stare,
.
your covetous smile is the colour of lichen ice,
toxic, freezing, breaking me into ruins,
by the hammer, of your ill deliberations,
repulsing me away, from your embrace,
.
you have the wan psyche of a fiend, colourless,
which rests beneath your masquerade,
of an angel, of the saint like eyes and voice, but
I can feel your sinister self, see you for who you are,
.
like you see me in my own colourless colours,
I am no better than you, I am a ravaging beast,
a mess of hues, purple, brown, olive, and blue,
splayed on and against, drenching my being
.
I am tagging it as the poem for 3 November for NaBloPoMo. Also submitting the link for dVerse Poetics.
HA, I really liked this, including the graphic use of colors for eacth attribute you spoke of. A well thought out piece of poetry. >KB
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Beautifully done, HA. Liked the rainbow play, as well.
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This is a dark palette – like the second person approach – a sort of letter poem in colors – dark yet vivid, pulsing with emotions. Well done!
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I am liking all the colors you have painted here ~ Really well done ~
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your voice is the color of crimson roses… oh i like that… full with emotions… and you serve a whole palette of them… cool that you chose colored fonds as well
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stacking the personalities like tins of paint on shelves or skeins of wool in a wicker basket
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Anmol, well done piece, that seems to fully serve the prompt in spades & roses, but it also has verbal musculature, that embraces the reality any relationship, soaring and racing from the emotional heights to the depressive dregs, illustrating that nothing in life is simply linear or one dimensional; good job.
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This turned so very dark, when the first stanza was almost light… well done.
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Brilliant use of color in more ways than one. 🙂
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..colourless is rather the shade of confusion…. finding your own shade (be it dark or light or blue or bloody) can define your place in the world and by knowing your colour can justify the role you want to portray… smiles…
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Very nice! Love all the different uses of color in this! 🙂
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I love this. it is so visually and lyrically beautiful!
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nice…i like your use of color in this…and the realization as well that we are not better in the end….i like that you give color to the voice…its starts rather beautiful…and then the colors take a twist…..
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Ooh sanctimonies….sometimes I just love the meaning and sound of a word so in some artsy poetic dorky way, I am happy I found your blog (via yeahwrite). Now I need to use sanctimony….somehow some way.
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You are being too hard on yourself…I don’t see you as a ravaging beast at all….a collage of hues is not quite the same thing…a rainbow warrior perhaps:)
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Evocative imagery and contrasts. Beautifully done 🙂
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Very clever an very beautiful =)
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Evocative and vivid– well done! 😀
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compelling words and interesting presentation. 🙂
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Your sanctimonies are the colour of much… I’ve just had someone visit like that – very, very vivid poem!
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nice presentation and poem
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The colours make this poem even more powerful.
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You started off softly ~ then came the twist – colour use unusual but giving impact to the piece – nicely done Anmol.
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I started it off with the intention of writing a romantic poem initially. I wrote the first two quatrains, which if you would notice, are really sweet and praising. But then I changed my mind and I wrote the negative side in 2 quatrains and ended with a concluding quatrain, leaving it. After a few hours, I edited it and then edited it again. I was just about to post, when I made another change… adding another quatrain, giving it the shape it came out to be.
Quite complicated… 🙂
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Goodness it certainly was – but it was well worth it in the end…that is the joy of writing ~ being the master to bring to a piece what we wish – well done 🙂
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I enjoyed the smoldering and the muck, and–by the end–the surprise equality. That is rare in these “match up” poems where someone is always submitting or wanting to! I feel awash in its colors.
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I am no better than you, I am a ravaging beast,
a mess of hues, purple, brown, olive, and blue,
splayed on and against, drenching my being
I do think we all are composed of a lot of different ‘colors’ which come out in us at different times. I enjoyed this poem, its color, its viewpoint. It made me think.
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This is a rather brutally honest poem–we all have this moodiness and range — which you bring out here–I especially liked the verse re the sanctimonious murk/muck. Thanks. k.
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This is an awesome use of color imagery 😉 sad and true …
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Coming over from the YeahWrite grid—what a lovely poem. Very revealing . Thanks for a great start to the day !!!
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You use really powerful language & create quite a mood – nice
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Great poem! I really related to it!
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I could relate to all of those color images. Relationships can be a color roulette wheel: what color is it going to be today?
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Oh well done. It describes us pretty well.
Anna :o]
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Thank you, Anna. Would you like to leave a link to some of your work as well? I’d be glad to visit it. 🙂
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I love the imagery on this…beautiful.
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Beautifully done. I liked the imagery, both visual and word.
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I really enjoyed this HA–so creative!
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Interesting use of colored type. Def gets the message home.
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That is a striking image, by the way. Your use of different colors for stanzas, then combining all within stanzas, worked well… except the green was a bit light. Green is a tricky color – sometimes comes out fine on a Mac and pale on Windows.
This is very good work, HA. Thumbs up! Amy
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I can feel the angst coming through your words.
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You certainly covered the spectrum of color and emotion–I like how you ended it, we all have our hues (hue are you?–sorry could not resist…) An excellent poem! 🙂
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Thank you. Ha! I am alright and ‘hue’ about you? 😀
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Love your words, and the colors of the lines and words worked really well here – a lot of work and very successful!
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