palette of colors
chrysanthemums bestowing
fragrance everywhere
.
watered with the dripping tears
fragile porcelain vase breaks
~
palette of colors
chrysanthemums bestowing
fragrance everywhere
.
deafening silence of night
a single flower befalls
.
* For Carpe Diem Haiku Kai Tan Renga Challenge # 17. The haiku “palette of colors” is written by Atreyee; complimenting it are the two verses written by me. I have completed the renga twice.
HA, I liked your poems, particularly the last one which I think, for me at least comes closest to satisfying the form you are working in.>KB
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Beautiful, best wishes
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I love the last line. Feels so real – to me – in many ways.
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a feeling of sadness in both…
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the flowers watered with tears…at least they give life and not take it eh? i like the blend of senses in hte opening gambit of each as well…
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That first Tan Renga you have completed HA is really stunning, that second stanza is really great.
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Both are really stunning.. flows so well..
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i love your offerings – both work the haiku perfect.
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