see,
look
within
my brown eyes,
you will be dazzled
and I will bear your weight because
as dark as I am, that is something I always do,
.
as dark as I am, that is something I always do,
you can judge me if you desire,
spurt me with wise words,
but look, see
within
these
eyes,
.
you
will
find my
lost shadow
and you will see me
as I am without my white mask
and my scars will be on display just for you to view,
.
all my scars will be on display just for you to view,
the blotted marks of a known truth-
life is hard to live,
grasp this fact
once you
see
me.
.
* Mine are brown but rather hollow; they don’t say anything. They remain mum.
** Fibonacci poetry (which I liked a lot once) for dVerse Form For All.
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the scars are most visible in the eyes… i would say this too…
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nice…i like the looking into the eyes to really see me, the shadow beyond the white mask…very interesting contrast in that….the scars and marks of truth as well….so true that…
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sometimes the mask needs to be removed.
thank you.
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A person’s eyes don’t like. They tell the truth. I think in everyone’s eyes there are some scars……if someone looks closely.
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Wow! Four stanzas! Bravo!!!
It’s true too – if you want to know what someone is thinking or feeling, the eyes rarely lie.
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Thank you. Eyes do have a language of their own.
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great idea to wave th3en up and down.
Visually attractive and the whole flows nicely.
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This is not only clever, but also beautiful and haunting, HA. Well done!
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Thank you very much. 🙂
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Wow, perfect combination of verse and imagery. Gripping and haunting.
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I like the weaving back and forth, I thought you would do a palindrome, smiles ~
Very well done, hypnotizing eyes ~
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Thanks. I have tried palindrome a number of times but the result never came out to be really good. So I did not give it a go this time… I just worked on the easier thing. 🙂
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I love this Ha.
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Thanks merbear.
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You are very talented, and I say this with pure honestly and admiration.
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And you are being really kind as well. I sincerely thank you for that.
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I know you do.
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Yes, life is hard to live, and so much can be seen in one’s eyes.
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Ah so very good! Very very good. Love the shapes, the repetition and the words.
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Eyes are the mirror of the soul and if we look deep we might see a portion of the journey.
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Well said.
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Ah most excellent.. you can tell that you are no beginner in fib.. love the weaving back and forth.
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The eyes detect the truth. It’s the savior in many instances. And you managed it in 4 great stanzas! Great, HA!
Hank
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Oh, so well done. It is all in the eyes.
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Quite brilliant – well done!
Anna :o]
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This was very effective in many ways. The formula yielded an almost concrete poem, the line repetition gave it a musical quality, and the subject matter explicated your unique truths. Excellent.
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eyes the windows to the soul…very special HA
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Incredible I really loved the form and the content outstanding!
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Really great write – I’ve seen survivors of trauma with so much fear in their eyes, I wonder if the fear will ever leave.
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Great use of the form–it’s like opening and closing eyes. My favorite line (As dark as I am…) you repeated twice–how thoughtful of you 😉
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Wow, you did it twice! Very good use of the Fibonacci scale – and almost a palindrome. I find near-rhymes and near-palindromes more fascinating than the real thing.
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….yes…yes…yes… the eyes will never lie… our eyes are the mirror of our soul and never failed to raise the truth… loved this… & the repetition of the final lines to serve as the starting line of the succeeding fib works verywell… smiles…
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