“Baby…”

Under the star light, he silently moved towards her.

She was sitting on the pier, gazing at the ripples of water, appearing on the sea surface. They were on a vacation and he was in a weird mood all the time.

“Baby”

She heard his voice and looked back. He had a sharp knife, clenched in his left hand with a mad look in his eyes. She was speechless, her mouth gasped open. Coming back to her senses, she shrieked.

“Listen, baby”

She wailed a long cry for help.

Lights switched on and people came pouring out, some spreading torchlight to brighten the night in front of them.

“What?”
“What happened?”
“Who was that?”
“Did you hear…?”
“Mom, I am afraid.”
“Hey, do you know?”

Rushing towards the location, they saw the entire scene; a mad man with a knife going to kill a young woman.

“Hey…,” a brave man moved ahead, talking to the man with the knife, “Throw that away. You can’t do anything to her now.”

“But…”

“Throw it away.”

He threw it away.

“And what is in you right hand. What are you hiding?”

He brought his hand forward to show a chocolate cake, resting on his palm.

A wave of shock fell across the peering crowd and the muttering started again.

“It is for my wife. It is her birthday; so I brought across a cake for her to cut down under the celestial light. It was a surprise,” he meekly said and started to cry.

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* Written in response of the Trifecta Challenge: Light

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31 thoughts on ““Baby…”

    • Thank you… Oh yes, he does cry in the end because I wanted to leave a perception on the reader, that they must not make their impressions of people just by seeing how they look.
      In this story, I guess the crowd played the correct role.. of course what else could be done in such a weird situation!?
      Thanks for reading.. 🙂

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    • The reason behind her constant fear was that because her husband was behaving quite weird during the vacation.. so some sort of doubt took place in her head. and moreover, what would one feel if one sees a man, be it the husband, coming in the night silently with a sharp knife in the hand.
      Thanks for reading.. 🙂

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  1. angelgal3176 says:

    Started off so dark and suspenseful, then pow! You get hit with cake! Nice! But shouldn’t she have known him well enough not to be so worried? Oh well – it ends well, so that’s good. Nicely done 🙂

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    • You know, I added the statement, “He was in a weird mood”.. so may be that has fueled her suspicions and hence, she responded in the way she did. We can not know because a character is like any real life person who performs some actions with no apparent reasons. Thanks for reading. 🙂

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  2. I liked that phrase, “he was in a weird mood,” but you’ve gotta wonder about their relationship, or her past, if she could worry that he was going to attack her! Makes one curious!

    Nice twist.

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  3. I really like the play with perceptions. It is something that I work with in my novel. I guess its the theme of prejudice in its subtle ways. But I also like how people came to the woman’s rescue. I doubt that would happen in real life.

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    • That is true. People tend to shy away from such situations, but there may be some brave hearts who would come forth to help some one. Thanks for the kind remark.

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